I woke up in the middle of the night as I was going to the bathroom, and there was a mysterious object sticking out of my bed. I pulled my legs up and hugged them with all my might. As I start to look under my bed I feel this force trying to pull me in, I try to pull back but it’s just too strong. Soon enough I find myself in this pitch black vortex of doom swirling all over the place from left to right, and up and down. There was slime every where. , It seemed as if I was under my bead, but yet inside of it. 
 All I heard as I was walking through this overly crowded place with junk from left to right was the “Splish-Splosh” noise from the bottom of my slippers. And a cold gust of wind, as it shivers up my spine. All of a sudden all I here is “who are you and what do you want from me” i reply, “my names Rachel and I was sucked in by this random vortex underneath my bed.”
 I turn around and see this tall skinny man with blonde stringy hair with green slime all over right in front of me. Long finger nails with brown gooey slime inside of them. I think to myself I can take him. We fought for hours, there was screeching and screaming slapping and crying and it finally ended I defeated him; I hit him over the head with a giant baseball bat.
 As I leave I heard the same noise as I did when I entered, Splish-Splosh, and than suddenly a cold gust of wind chilled up my spine, the wind, it was whispering to me. I finally reliized this wasnt over and it is a "skeloton in the closet".........
                                                                                To be continued
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7 comments:
nicee
cool storyy!! :)
Hey, tell me more about this big battle! Also, let's try to use more figurative language instead of the word "slime," ok?
Your imagery with the slippers was great--nice sound effects! Add some more detail and the rest of your "to be continued..." for me please.
I liked your story alot = )
ok im reading the story and im really into it the i see to be continued.. lol but it was still good
Your story has a lot of detail and it's shows good horror. Just try to make sure your sentences don't run on too much. Other than that your story is great.
To add to my earlier comment, I thought your story was really good!.... I agree with Ms.Lambard, more detail about the battle would be nice! Great Story though!
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